And all the bits where I tried to be subtle (like the man who has syphilis, but I never SAID it was syphilis) - they need to go. Just put it all out there.
HEY KIDS! THIS IS A BOOK ABOUT SEX!!*
AND DON'T HAVE UNPROTECTED SEX, CAUSE YOU'LL GET SYPHILIS AND YOUR NOSE WILL FALL OFF!!!
Seriously, though. It is unbelievable difficult to write sexual tension without it falling into a revolting pit of slimy, writhing, throbbing millsandboon cliches.
...her heart swelled...
...she felt a quickening...
...their eyes met...
...he touched her hand, she she felt a tingling...
Yech.
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(((*there is no actual sex in the book, though**. except for that bit with two very minor characters up against a wall.)))
2 comments:
ha.
minor, as in underage? :p
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